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Home: 99-word Flash Fiction

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This is no regular cave, but a lava tube we visited in Hawaii!

For the Carrot Ranch June 24 Flash Fiction Challenge to write a 99-word story involving dirt, here’s my story.


Home

In the dirt that covered the cave’s smooth rock wall, the girl drew an outline of the woolly mammoth she had seen last week.

 “Uhn-ga.” Her mother’s grunt summoned her to stay close. The men were farther in, exploring silently. Behind her, a baby whimpered.

She glanced up at her mother’s excited eyes. For so long her family had been on the run from wild beasts, hunger, exposure, and territorial rages of other clans. Could they have finally found a refuge all their own?

The call came. “Ay-ah-o!”

Her mother smiled, and she clapped her hands.

They were home!

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16 comments on “Home: 99-word Flash Fiction

  1. Charli Mills
    June 25, 2015

    Love this flash! Your use of language, and details of how a little girl would think draws us int the credibility of this ancient story and becomes one we relate to today.

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    • Sarrah J. Woods
      June 26, 2015

      Thank you, Charli! I really appreciate your encouragement. Have a great day!

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  2. Sacha Black
    June 27, 2015

    Charli’s right this is a great piece of flash. You should be more confident I think you’re a fantastic writer 😊

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  3. BobiJo
    June 27, 2015

    I found your story imaaginative. Real emotions in so few words, that i could feel the joy of ‘home’.

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    • Sarrah J. Woods
      June 27, 2015

      Thank you! I’m glad to hear that my story manages to communicate that feeling. I like the 99-word constraint; it helps me focus in on the bare essentials of a story/scene. Thanks again!

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  4. mj6969
    June 28, 2015

    Well written and an interesting perspective and choice in response to the flash 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    • Sarrah J. Woods
      July 1, 2015

      Thank you! I followed one of the “Pixar Rules of Storytelling” and eliminated my first several ideas to push myself to a more unique idea. I think I’ll keep doing that!

      Liked by 1 person

      • mj6969
        July 3, 2015

        A good idea and approach – sometimes it’s the other ideas lurking that are the ones that work out, in the moment, for the best 🙂

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  5. You could feel the relief when they found they were home. And I loved the way she whiled away the time by drawing a woolly mammoth on the wall. Great flash.

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  6. Norah
    June 29, 2015

    Great flash. You’ve told so much in so few words; a perspective from each member of the family. The importance of art for self-expression, a calming diversion, and a record of experiences is all portrayed. Well done.

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    • Sarrah J. Woods
      July 1, 2015

      Thanks for pointing out those aspects of my story. I hadn’t thought of any of those things you mentioned, actually! I love how fiction works like that—even a tiny story like this one can allow for seemingly infinite interpretation and application.

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      • Norah
        July 3, 2015

        Sometimes even we do not know the magic we weave! 🙂

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